Ok, here's our first song, tear it up

[georgemichael]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=daPcSnotfDs

Me and a friend made a song, it's about an ex, actually the ex that I said I wanted to send a christmas gift to last year and everybody told me I was a whipped pussy. Oh well...

Just tear into it, let us know all the embarassingly revealing, amateurish, crappy recording sound, lack of whatever. We are open to criticism. We want to make good music, this was my theme, he thought of the guitar chorus and the bridge. The lyrics were done by me, which are not good or bad, I just had to get them off my chest.

[GORDONFREEMAN]

"embarassingly revealing, amateurish, crappy recording sound"


This

But overall good job and i actually listened to the whole thing

[Marijuanasaurus]

I was about to come in here and insult you for making such shitty music, but that wasnt half bad. Just work on your singing and recording obviously.

Also, your name is pretty gay. That is all.

[thendoftheline]

I liked it.. pretty darn good actually. It deserves a better recording. Haha, are you gonna show her, or have you? What did she think?

[The Flux Capacitard]

Good effort bro. Get yourself a full band, flesh it out, and have it professionally recorded. Post a new link. :thumbsup:

[imawolfrawr]

needs more breakdowns :thumbsup:

[Zanick]

Damn... I enjoyed that. Nice job sir.

[alex chilton]

mehh it was okay. i like the simplicity, and you can probably sing better than me, but my music is still better.

[T.K. Baha]

Its not my style of music really, too down. You guys didn't really mess up when you recorded it though.

[AtrainV]

Moving this to the Musicians Playground.

[THIS IS IMPORTANT GODDAMNIT]

This is actually pretty good. A bit more guts behind the vocals would be good, kinda sounds like you aren't singing them to your full potential.

[Rainycity]

good job.

[the beat]

It's pretty decent I would say. You're a Nirvana fan aren't you?

[Famous Monster]

Kinda reminded me of alice in chains. In all honesty, sounded gimmicky at first, then turned good.

[TruthWielder]

Not my style, not awesome but...pretty ok man!

It did get better.

[poast-bortem!]

I skipped to the middle and all I heard was some shitty guitar strumming and the lyrics "to black out the light."

Yeeeeah... don't quit your day job.