The Reply

[RosettaStoned]

Lemme know what you think. If you would like me to explain any specific parts I would be more than happy.

The Reply
"Ladies and Gentlemen, please,
I have come to a decision.
This won't be easy, no,
But the only way is to
Multiply by division."

Dead echoes,
Reverberated,
Came back to me
Distorted and distraught:
Mindless thoughts regurgitated.

"The sky is bluer this evening."
That's it,
Tell me what I want to hear;
I am falling
Into the minute hands---
These tedious quicksands.

"Have you no soul?"
I've been washed away,
Like Fall's withered leaves---
Winter, numb me into
A delicate reprieve.

The moon illuminates;
The fruit I bore is found
Festering in shit and rot.
These feelings placed upon a beam,
On the other side was not a pound.

[Vizier]

Good poem. It somehow reminded me of a girl I liked and rejected me :)

[RosettaStoned]

My God!! Thank you Vizier!!! Jesus, no one has commented on this the whole time it's been up, I enjoyed writing it very much, so I was looking for some feedback on it. Thanks again, and yea, that's what it's about. I wrote it after breaking up with my girlfriend of 8 months (my first love, ughh, shitty), so yea, it's pretty much about a break-up, or to make it more general, finding the truth about someone or something you that that you loved. Well thanks again Vizier.

[I am]

Rosetta, I think the reason why very few people commented, is because your poetry is just too good. I read your poem and really enjoyed reading it but I can't really give any constructive feedback, as the skill of your poetry is completely beyond me. Which works for me, as I get to read something that makes me scratch my head and go wow, but might be a little frustrating to you.

Hopefully as Zoklet grows there will be more people able to fully comprehend you works and help improve it. Until then keep writing.

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The Friendly Lurker

[RosettaStoned]

I am, sweet Jesus, it is so good to hear it! Haha. Seriously, thank you so much for your kind words. I'm really glad that you enjoy reading my stuff :D. Well, anyways, thanks man.

[Major General Franklin Kirby]

That isn't poetry it is some emo diatribe. Gay, F-

[RosettaStoned]

That isn't poetry it is some emo diatribe. Gay, F-

Cool story bro.

[0omnidirectional]

Rosetta, I think the reason why very few people commented, is because your poetry is just too good. I read your poem and really enjoyed reading it but I can't really give any constructive feedback, as the skill of your poetry is completely beyond me. Which works for me, as I get to read something that makes me scratch my head and go wow, but might be a little frustrating to you.

Hopefully as Zoklet grows there will be more people able to fully comprehend you works and help improve it. Until then keep writing.

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The Friendly Lurker


I knew it, that must be it.
That is why no one ever replies to my threads.

[RosettaStoned]

I knew it, that must be it.
That is why no one ever replies to my threads.

Haha. Jesus, yea, I frequent another site for writing and the likes and it's rare that anyone replies to my stuff there. Ya know what though 0omni. I like you, and I can't sleep. So I'll review a whole bunch of shit, cause I'm in the mood.