Looking for critique (Trip Hop, Electronic)

[adrieann]

So I'm definitely looking for some constructive criticism on my music.
I'm finally making stuff that I feel is decent and worth sharing.
These are my two latest tracks:

Lonely Ghost
http://soundcloud.com/acuriousincident/lonely-ghost

To Fall Apart
http://soundcloud.com/acuriousincident/to-fall-apart

This is my soundcloud page, if you like what you hear at all please check my other stuff out and tell me what you think. Any pointers you have, suggestions, changes I could make, directions I could go in.

Thanks people of Zoklet

[dephdiddy]

I have nothing constructive for either one,
I very much enjoyed the first one, It came together beautifully and I loved the piano playing after the second change up!
The second one I didn't think I was going to enjoy because of the crispy synths being so sporadic but after i gave it a second or two I found myself surprisingly loving it as well!!
Very cool music, I wish I could say there was something you could do to make it better, but off the top of my head I can't think of anything.
Keep it up and keep us posted!

[adrieann]

Well thank you very much man. I appreciate the encouragment : D

[ilovechronic]

I think taking out the symbols in the top one and switching up the drum breaks would improve it.

[adrieann]

Yeah someone else told me that removing the cymbals would be a good idea. I just thought they added a lot to the emotion, made it more dense. I'll definitely mess around changing up the cymbals. What do you mean by switching up the drum breaks?

[Charles Manson]

turn dfown all the fucking hihats and percs in the second song, they are too fucking crisp, as deph said, they are too loud and too crisp, but the sampling is marvelous compared to the first track you posted.

The second one isnt bad, you just need to turn all the hihat shit down.

[adrieann]

Yeah I didn't get that crispness through the headphones I'm using, I listened to it on different speakers and agree that they should be adjusted. Thanks man.
What do you think of the first track?

And does "not bad" mean good? Or just literally not bad? haha

[pseudonym]

First one was fucking awesome man! Loved the Eternal sunshine quotes/parts, great movie. Second one was good too but first one tops it. Don't have any suggestions at the moment but if i do I'll be sure to let ya know.

[Charles Manson]

Originally Posted by adrieann

Yeah I didn't get that crispness through the headphones I'm using, I listened to it on different speakers and agree that they should be adjusted. Thanks man.
What do you think of the first track?

And does "not bad" mean good? Or just literally not bad? haha

I really didnt like the sampling too much on the first one, it all seemed a bit crowded, but the second one was pretty fucking nice bro.

Not really my style but i can certainly appreciate it from a technical point of view...



I dont do too much sampling myself, i just make all my own sounds and play them out how they sound right on my keyboard....

[adrieann]

Yeah I was going for a more dense feel with the first one but I think I overdid it a little.
But thanks a lot man, I appreciate it.

Yeah I like programming my own sounds a fair amount, but using actual instruments that I sample me playing adds a more organic feel to the music.